Fehu is definitely a fitting rune for the gold-haired Lady of bounty . The words are very evocative even if the meter is not metronomical . If you want to have a go at the meter again though, I could try to do a little line tweaking here and there for curiosity's and fun's sake, to see how it would turn out - it's something I really enjoy doing. May I play a bit with the words ?
Good grief, I LOVE IT! The meter is completely corrected and uses so much better wording than this version. I may remake this picture with this text, if you so allow, and you can feel free to post your version as a Deviation of your own if you wish.
I'm happy you like it ! Please feel free to use this version with your picture, I'd be honored! I'd love to try to find a tune for it, so the 'Song' becomes complete ...
Thank you for your kind offer! As my version would not exist without yours, my suggestion is I credit you as original author and me for building upon it, if that is allright with you? And I would also love to include it in my poetry collection website, "Odin's Gift" (www.odins-gift.com) if I may ?